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时间:17-12-24 10:34  作者:추억  类型:英语作文 包月发表人气:581

Since I was born, god has given me a lot of gifts, such as gentle mother 's love, strict father 's love, etc., but I write not these, but * without Chinese grandma 's love.

The sun in winter

Remember once, my grandmother and I went to Xiandong Hill to turn the mountain, but just walked to the half, suddenly changed day, ( it was winter ) under the goose feather snow, but then just walked to the half, into the half, back is half. So I had to crustily skin of head to move on. I gradually began to h*e a fever, my grandma nervously posted on my head. I gradually began to fall asleep, grandma took off his coat, put on my body, back up I walked forward quickly ... I woke up, opened my eyes, vaguely see grandma is cooking for me

 

 

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